Post 1 Draft
With this first post, my biggest problem was clearly length. This was due to my own failing to make the assumption that my reader will have most likely seen the movie already, and therefore I went into excruciating detail about the film itself. Once I had made the proper assumption, I was able to drastically shorten my post so as to make it much more readable for my readers.
Post 2 Draft
The problem with my second, vampire focused post was mainly a lack of context and evidence. I mentioned glittery vampires without bringing up twilight directly, and talked about many of the classical vampire powers without giving examples to show that they were actually, in fact, classic. Once I realized this it was a simple matter to go back through my post to provide examples and the required context, leading to the post currently up on the main blog page.